Today in the 9-9:50 a.m. class we read Brent Staples's essay in 50 Essays (383). The discussion was lively and lengthy (smile), so we didn't have time to practice free paraphrasing.
I gave each student a sentence from the essay to do a free paraphrase. Post the original sentence and the free paraphrase. Remember, except for shared language, that is, words common to daily use, you cannot use any of Staples's words. Keep the sentence structure. This means, that if he uses a list, you have to use a list. If he uses an adjective and a noun or a verbal phrase, so do you.
Maintain his intention at all times. Chose synonyms that convey the same emotional meaning or connotation.
Homework is chapter two in They Say. Post on the blog. Again for exercise two, use one of this week's assigned essays to summarize. The summaries do not have to be long, just complete. Make sure, you capture the writer's intention with concrete, powerful verbs and nouns.
Bring to class electronically if you have a laptop or on paper (if you do not). The 9-9:50 a.m. class electronically is fine. We will meet in A-205 Monday morning.
Homework once again is to Read They Say, The Happiness Project and 50 Essays. After our review on Monday morning, we will spend time in all classes on THP. Make sure you bring your notes and books and have read the week's assignment.
Kimberley Squire
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English 1A 9-9:50AM
21 February 2013
Assignment: Post the original sentence and the free paraphrase from Brent Staples essay.
Original sentence assigned, Brent Staples essay page 383, 1st paragraph:
To her, the youngish black man – a broad six feet two inches with a beard and billowing hair, both hands shoved into the pockets of a bulky military jacket – seemed menacingly close.
Paraphrased sentence:
The woman seeing the black youthful looking man who was tall, and full of ballooning hair had his hands pushed into his massive military jacket appeared alarming close.
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Paraphrasing of Staple's sentence from "Walk On By"
"As a softy who is scarcely able to take a knife to raw chicken- let alone hold it to a person's throat- I was surprised, embarassed, and dismayed all at once."
(Being one of wimpish character that barely can acquaint an edged blade to uncooked land-foul - hitherto be conceivably allowed to one's own devices accost with said cutlery any human's esophagus- myself left astonished, humiliated, also perturbed totally in one singular instance.)
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(also perturbed in one fowl swoop)
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English 1A 9-9:50am
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Paraphrasing Staples HW
Original Sentence: Over the years, I learned to smother the rage i felt at so often being taken for a criminal.
Literal Paraphrased Sentence: As time passed by, he [Staples] was able to suppress the anger he frequently experienced while assuming he was a convict.
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Summary two stories
Brent Staples observed that he was incidentally got prejudiced by other people due to his races. He found out that other people, especially women, thought he was a dangerous man who could do anything violent to them. They became defensing him as a criminal man. Later on he learned how to make people feel more positive about him. He practiced different kind of activities that a criminal man would not do. He seemed more friendly and peaceful. I have the same feeling with Brent because I got prejudiced by other people because of my races, my representation, and my knowledge. I remembered when I first came to the United States. I didn’t know how to speak English, and how to dress up. Moreover, I didn’t know the tradition of America, so I didn’t act appropriately. I felt depress and disappoint about myself. Since I have been in school and had some American friends, I began to familiar with the ways people think and act in America. As a result, I feel more comfortable around the people I associate with.
Brent Staples is an African American man who was mistaken as a bad person such as a criminal man. People prejudiced him when they saw him public places due to his races. He found himself in such unfortunate situations because people thought that he caused problems. He knew his situations and learned to find a better ways to represent himself. I am kind of understanding why the people though he was such a bad person. However, I think he was the one causing his own problems. He might make people feel as his is a bad person. Except for those unlucky situations, why he put himself involving such problems and then proved that he was innocent. He might take himself as a characteristic and play himself in his own games. Was he mistaken or attempted to do it? He is the man who only knows the answer.
Barbara complained that she was so tired to work for corporation that tried to make money on other people. The corporation didn’t care for their employees’ health and benefits but money. Moreover, she acknowledged how hardship those employees who have low paying job have to suffer. In my opinion, I can understand how hard to live in life with without or not enough money. Especially, those homeless people who have to live in their car and street, the loneliness and coldness are the most enemies of all. In addition, when you decided to work for someone, you have to be ready for giving out your best to serve them.
Barbara assisted that managers in restaurants didn’t care for their employees’ benefits and health along with the facility in workplace. Moreover, she observed that employees with the low paying wages might the hardship in financial and housing matter. In contrast, I guess she might think so negative about such poor lives. In the U.S. today, it is not unusual to find many workers with low paying wages; however, they are still happy and well manage their life. It is not about how much you earn will give you a good life; it is about whether or not you think your life is good.
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Professor Sabir
22 February 2013
Paraphrase
It was clear that she thought herself the quarry of a mugger, rapist, or worse.
The woman thought of herself as a possible prey of a mugger, rapist, or worse.
Alex Noble
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Professor Sabir
23 February 2013
Original
I have been calm and extremely congenial on those rare occasions when I've been pulled over by the police.
Paraphrased
Though scarce, the times I've been stopped by law enforcement, I have remain level-headed and friendly.
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Professor Sabir
24 February 2013
Original
Perhaps it was because in Chester, Pennsylvania, the small, angry industrial town where I came of age in the 1960s, I was scarcely noticeable against a backdrop of gang warfare, street knifings, and murderers.
Paraphrase
Maybe by reason of in Chester, Pennsylvania, the tiny, furious borough where I grew up in the '60s, I was insufficiently eye-catching beside a habitat full of gang violence, stabbings and the killing of others.
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Professor Sabir
Pg. 383; First paragraph; 3rd sentence
"As I swung onto the avenue behind her, there seemed to be a discreet, uninflammatory distance between us."
As I subsequently turned the corner, there seemed to be a safe space between her and I.
Manuel Flores
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English 1A 9-9:50 am
23 February 2013
Original
"They were babies, really -- a teenage cousin, a brother of twenty-two, a childhood friend in his mid-twenties -- all gone down in episodes of bravado played out in the streets."
Paraphrase
Those were kids obviously, -- a young relative, an older sibling, a twenty-five year old conrad -- all showed brave acts in their neighborhood.
Corina Guerra
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Eng 1A 9-9:50 am
23 February 2013
Original
The fearsomeness mistakenly attributed to me in public places often has a perilous flavor.
Paraphrase
The frightening mistake that i have in open areas is always dangerous.
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original sentence from Brent Staples pg. 384 paragraph 3: After Dark, on the warrenlike streets of Brooklyn where I lived, I often see women who fear the worst from me.
Paraphrased sentence: When night falls, amongst an animal bound territory in which I resume, it's not rare to spot ladies that are terrified of my appearance.
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Original sentence is from page 385, parapgraph 2: The fearsomeness mistakenly attributed to me in public places often has a perilous flavor.
Paraphrased Sentence: The scariest of the intricacies happened in the late 1970s and early 1980s while I was working as a journalist in Chicago.
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Original : It was the echo of that terrified woman's footfalls that I first began to know the unweildly inheritance I've come into- the ability to alter public spaces in ugly ways.
Paraphrase: I first began to realize the innate effect i had of changing the social climate into tension when the nervous woman's footsteps reverberated through the streets.
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